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    dots Submission Name: Why do I hurt those I love?dots
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    Author: DrewDilla
    ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 131/196/51
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       I just always think I hurt my family n friends more then enemies.


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    dotsWhy do I hurt those I love?dots
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    Why do I hurt those I love?
    This is a question for God.
    So I look really far above.
    So your, head you nod.
    Cause, you hear them two.
    Ya Godís not one but many.
    And, off the building they flew.
    They full of Answers for any
    Question you may have about life.
    Like Why I get mad very easy.
    Got to fix this, before I got a wife.
    So sheíll chill, clean and, please me.
    But she wonít do all the house work.
    Well share n split all the chores.
    Together we can be one big dork.
    Sometime Iíll treat you like some hoers.
    And, I donít know why I canít stop it
    I open my mouth and bad stuff comes out.
    Wish I could close it like a locket.
    But, why canít I get on a clear route,
    And, be nice to family and friends.
    Instead I act like I hate them very much
    And, to the breaks I start to amends.
    Cause, I have godsí holy touch.




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