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    dots Submission Name: a happy feelingdots
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    Author: foxy lee
    ASL Info:    20 f/CT/SA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 27/23/10
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsa happy feelingdots
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    This feeling is amazing
    all butterflies and sweety pies
    constant smiles on your happy face

    when you lie awake
    and think happy thoughts
    and your insides dance
    and you're "out of sorts"

    but...you don't mind...

    because your dreams are made
    of honey and pie
    and the scent you love
    makes you shiver and sigh

    the laugh that rings from your
    wonderful voice
    when you feel that kiss
    you want to rejoice

    and you feel so good
    from your head to your toes
    that you shyly blush deeper
    than a single red rose

    And you hope the feeling
    never goes away
    as you wake up

    to the morning

    of a brand new day




    Submitted on 2007-01-14 13:59:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love this poem. You've captured the feelings of love beautifully.

    My favorite lines have to be:

    "the laugh that rings from your
    wonderful voice
    when you feel that kiss
    you want to rejoice"
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by Super_pudding | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very sweet and describes perfectly the feelings we get at the beginning of a new romance. good flow and rhythm, very enjoyable.
    had me smiling...i remember those feelings ~

    'because your dreams are made
    of honey and pie
    and the scent you love
    makes you shiver and sigh'

    thanks for sharing.
    michelle
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem. i tend to write sorta the same way. i like the imagery and details you use to describe every little part of this piece. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is very sweet...

    This is my favorite part:

    "when you lie awake
    and think happy thoughts
    and your insides dance
    and you're "out of sorts"
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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