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    dots Submission Name: If I Could Wear Your Skindots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsIf I Could Wear Your Skindots
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    If I Could wear your skin
    If for only for a day
    I would layout in the summer sun
    and burn jerky red
    I would cut off all your hair
    and glue it too your ass
    teach you to walk backwards
    even with your ass talking you will have more class
    I would take the sagging skin
    from your sagging breast
    make a pair of shoes
    to kick your cheating ass
    when the day was over
    and I have to return your skin
    you would tell me that you love me
    and again it all begins.




    Submitted on 2007-01-14 14:11:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well...this is interesting and full of hate.

    I like it...lol.

    "If I Could wear your skin
    If for only for a day
    I would layout in the summer sun
    and burn jerky red"

    That was my favorite part...I never thought about it this way...;P
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting write Twice
    You seem so angry in this write
    But I must admit your feelings came across perfectly
    My only advice would be to give this person another chance as everyone deserves another chance
    If she has run out of second chances then my Friend I would definately say from the sound of your anger It is time to move on
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me knoiw what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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