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    dots Submission Name: Beneath The Leavesdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 648
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       Listening to music EARLY this morning, and inspiration struck


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    dotsBeneath The Leavesdots
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    Lying under a blanket of stars,
    Staring up into the sky
    I turn my head to see your face
    And you gaze into my eyes
    Lying under the cover of night,
    I speak to you of how I feel
    You give me a perfect, dazzling smile
    And then a kiss you steal
    The night is coming to an end,
    And I'm afraid it's time to go
    But before we climb to our feet,
    There's something I want to know

    If I lay here,
    Would you decide to stay
    Would you remain by my side
    As the night slowly turned to day?
    We could lie here in the grass
    Underneath our canopy of stars
    We could claim this night for our own
    And the whole world could be ours.

    We could lie here till our bodies take root
    And the grass grows around our knees
    We could share a million kisses
    And pay homage to the trees
    We could be a part of the earth,
    Feel the rain on our skin
    We could hide underneath the leaves
    Until the clovers spring forth again
    We could spend an eternity together
    Woven among the flowers
    These seconds could turn into minutes
    Minutes that become ours

    If I just lay here
    Would you stay here too?
    Then I could muster the courage to say
    That I'm in love with you.
    We could lie here in the grass
    Underneath our blanket of stars
    We could claim this night for our own
    And the whole world would be ours.




    Submitted on 2007-01-14 16:18:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this so much! This is so easy to understand and flows so well and its so romantic! I love it! Very well done!

    -angel-
    | Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]


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