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My once everything..

Author: Kimmy
ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
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i loved him.. and he left me..because he didnt "have time for a relationship"... but tells me he loves me still...

My once everything..

I see you everyday,
just coming in,
buying food,
but never speaking
always smiling, and watching.
A month this has been,
and i never noticed til then.
One time, you came twice,
We were busy, and you froze,
took the drink from me, and left without a word.

Closing wasnt the same that night,
didnt have the courage to do it yourself,
but i let it slide,
Days went by, and no phone call..
Came in again, and i confronted.
Said you were busy, but would call.

And that call ended after two hours,
you told me you thought we talked for 20 minutes.
Days went by and phone calls kept coming,
And i kept answering..
Phone calls became meetings
and meetings became my heart..
i kept denying myself of loving
but you promised more than once,
and straight into my face
that you would never...

A month and im happy as i can be
the sweet little comments kept on coming,
never had slow down..

Kissing under the mistletoe..
"I've never been kissed"
My worst ticklish spot,
the way you look at me..
The way you tell me you love me
Calling me baby..
And the Song "Nobody" by Keith Sweat
When you wink at me, just for the fact that you know i cant do it..
and most of all,
Your smile..

i miss it all..
Because for some reason,
it left abruptly...
you dont "have time for a relationship"
and you "cant focus all time on one thing"
and it hurts to know,
you dont have time for me..

Submitted on 2007-01-14 22:56:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  xD What an aaaass. *slaps herself* Sorry. But if someone has time to flirt and kiss and call then he has time to be in a relationship. He's either using your or being a pussy.

Nice poem though. :333
| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
  That's really brutal. Overall the poem was great. I loved this line because of th way you let it trail off...

"that you would never..." works really well.

Nice job, and sorry bout the guy,

| Posted on 2007-01-14 00:00:00 | by Falling Rain | [ Reply to This ]

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