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    dots Submission Name: Nocturnedots
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    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 256
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       Ironically, written at sunrise...


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    dotsNocturnedots
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    It’s been ages since I’ve seen the sun,
    And frankly I don’t miss it.
    Its rays—once warm and comforting
    I find are now offensive and harmful.
    It cannot compare
    To the cool, crisp melody of the night.
    The darkness soothes and protects
    My nude, smooth skin
    The light from the moon, a whispered hush
    Gently kissing my surface.
    Warmth is overrated,
    When the cool dark is so beautiful--
    So sensual, so secretive.
    The crescent moon smirks at me,
    As if she knows something I don’t.
    And I don’t mind,
    Because at least
    She knows something.




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      Stoli Roses-

    I like this piece beacuse it is an interesting way to look at the sun and the moon; almost as characters, your friends. The concept is very original and different, but considering the poem is about nature, you could change it a bit to make more of the lines have a stronger impact on the reader. Definitely darkly erotic for a nature poem, and I've never said that before.
    Nice write

    ~Mykquillion
    | Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]
      :D i like! very darkly erotic.....darkness over light is a great concept that I know all too well...I probably cannot write on that subject anymore since I wrote a book worth of poems for that type alone.
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by iaida | [ Reply to This ]
      I too prefer the night. It makes me feel like I'm alone and yet surrounded at the same time. The kiss of crisp, cool air; the sea of diamonds in the sky that only sparkle when it's dark;
    and the moon! *sigh* I could stare at her face for hours. The beauty of the night is incomparable. I've yet to find anything that can match it. May you be able to enjoy the sacred night for many years to come.

    The Bird
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]
      I heartily agree - the sun is an overrated creature to be sure; wonder why they worshipped it once? Prolly the same reason it seems to know nothing. Not too many people can be comfortable in the dark and even fewer who prefer it. I guess evolutaionarily its maladaptive, but then evolution is all about adaptation, and one day the world will belong to the night...
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was really good, my favourite line was-

    The crescent moon smirks at me,
    As if she knows something I don’t.
    And I don’t mind,
    Because at least
    She knows something.

    honestly, I really really liked that line alot :-p
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]



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