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The Girl in My Reflection


Author: deathbroken
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Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Mirror or Mask
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When my birthday is coming, and all i can think of is sadness...


The Girl in My Reflection



I'm the girl who laughs when I'm sad
I'm the girl who smiles then I'm hurt
I'm the girl who suffers alone
I'm the girl who's heart is made of stone

A hand grabbing on my heart
Pulling and tugging with all it's might
I try so hard not ti give up
but the temptation was just too much

She's the girl who draws her own blood
She's the girl who bleeds tears
She's the girl who thinks of death
She's the girl who's world is black

Shedding tears on her birthday
Crying herself to sleep
Her heart hurting so bad
She trembles and wavers under the pressure

When I give in to the darkness
She falls deeper into it
If I cut my wrist
She's the one who will die

I look into the mirror
She's there staring at me with solemn eyes
I am her
She is me
My reflection, my twin, myself.




Submitted on 2007-01-15 08:23:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Intriguing story, and nice rhythm and structure!
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Intriguing story, and nice rhythm and structure!
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Intriguing story, and nice rhythm and structure!
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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