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    Author: Raindrops
    ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 184/213/288
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       Written on January 9, 2007.
    Mom's visit


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    Your visit was nice
    yeah, your visit was great
    loved having you here
    loved seeing your face

    But now you're gone
    and I'm alone
    I wish you were here
    and not on your own.




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      It was a nice sweet short poem, kind of reads like a "Miss You" card, so if that's what you were going for, you excelled very well.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was well written and very good word choices throughout.

    I liked the rhythym. This was a good well written Free Verse poem

    Good Job,
    Glen
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by usglen | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a cute short poem and right down to the point. I think it was good and it was written in a way that your feelings showed. good job.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]


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