I Don't Love You Anymore by Autum-Moon

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Author:	Autum-Moon
ASL Info:	15/Female/drowing
Elite Ratio:	3.22 - 284/165/29
Words:	139

Class/Type:	Poetry/What you did
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This poem is about my mother. Times with her have been rough and lately she kicked me out of the house duringa bad storm. I am at a lose to what to say to her, and this is a poem to her.

I Don't Love You Anymore dots

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You look at me,
and I cry.
Alone and scared,
Its over between me and you.
As my mother I confided in you
Told you this Pain and buring feeling of lonlyness
wont go away.
I ask for you to believe in me, to care
But you never cared.
I tired to get you to listen and understand,
But every word i said burned
Disappeard and never heard.
All those hurtful words you said
Broke me down, left me alone

Never Again

And now,
as the winds blows
as the stars shine and the moon glows
I will walk alone.
But as I turn to leave
I look at you and say
I dont love you
Tomorrow, Today, Forever

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  you should know that alot of ppl feel that way about thier mothers i have but not the pont it is really sad and everthing will work out for the best it all happens for a reason well good write and my best wishes with that

palin
| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by palin_white | [ Reply to This ]
  This was good, it was kinda choppy but thats not the point htis was just to get your feelings out.

I really like the line

"I tired to get you to listen and understand,
But every word i said burned"

Very good use of words and describing what the scene was like. i also haved alot of problems bout my mom and wrote alot of pieces about her, so your not alone.

hope to hear from you and keep ur head up

Max
Aka
Lil' Mix
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so sad. I can relate to the first part of the poem though even through all that happened I could never stop loving my mom. I hope everything works out for you. The poem was great. Good luck.

Sarah

| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very sad, and the poem is very charged with emotion. But you cannot forsake your mother, just as you have no choice in who your family is. No matter what happens---blood is blood. You have to remember that your mother is a person, and people make mistakes. To err is human, to forgive is divine. And forever is a really long time. I'm sure you still love your mother....you just don't like her very much. Anyhow, good luck with however you handle the situation...good write
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
  After reading htis I remembered what my Mom did when I was on the streets with no money and no place to sleep. She brought me home and helped me to gain my health.

She is dead now. She died on November 5th 2006.

It was cruel what your Mother did to you. She shouldn't have done any thing like that. She'll pay for what she did to you eventually.

Good luck,
Glen
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by usglen | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow...this is really sad. Unfortunatly, I can't relate to it at all...I have a great relationship with my mother. I'm so sorry that this happened to you...whatever it was...cuz I can imagine how much it hurts. I almost cried when I read this...

Kris
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]

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