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    dots Submission Name: Silver Day Sad Day dots

    Author: Mykquillion
    ASL Info:    20/M/NEB
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 109/124/41
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSilver Day Sad Day dots

    She slices through the cake with great enthusiasm,
    Unaware, she slices through me as well.
    She decided today was a day
    For celebration,

    Today is my least favorite day of the year.

    My second wife stands in the kitchen,
    My first wife stays in her grave.

    She proudly places the cake in front of me.

    I often think that my first wife was an angel.
    I often think that the second wife is a hyena.
    Scrounging all she can out of me,
    And laughing while she does it.

    This is the silver anniversary,
    Of the day I lost my angel forever;
    As the hyena wife brings in
    A silver cake, to celebrate,
    The day I had to start;
    A new life,
    With a new wife,
    And a broken heart.

    Submitted on 2007-01-15 16:25:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh wow this poem was really good.

    "My second wife stands in the kitchen,
    My first wife stays in her grave."

    those are the best lines. you used great imagery and deep emtions. great job.

    J. Ackson Jr.
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this alot, it was powerful, frightening and emotion filled. Very sincere I guess. I can't give this much critisism, I liked it as much as you could like something as morbid as this write is, which happens to be alot :-p.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. It was sad though. I hope it wasn't writin' from experiance but if so I'm sorry. The peice was powerful in image. ANd your comparison of the two made it all the better. Great write. Emotionaly chraged and heartwrenching. Keep on writin'.

    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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