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    dots Submission Name: Me, Myself, Idots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 847
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I guess I'm tired of everybody cmplaining that nobody cares and being so self absorbed.
    I wonder what they would do if they really were alone.


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    dotsMe, Myself, Idots
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    I filled my bathtub with self-pity today
    And sat there for a while
    Thinking only of myself
    And how things make me feel
    I always tried to do my best
    I heard my inner voice cry
    Bathing, crying, self obsessed
    I never asked me why.

    I drowned myself in selfishness today
    And looked up at concern
    The faces of those who pity me
    Distorted by the waters blur
    I donít see how, they see me here
    I know Iím all alone
    They never cared, I still believe
    They never gave a damn

    I built a house of pride today
    And cowered beneath the eaves
    My home, protection, all I know
    The wonder that is me
    I know them all, they never could
    Understand the way I am
    I am the only one who feels
    The only one with bloodied hands

    I fell today, I needed one
    Who would raise me up again
    But the pityís had enough, and left
    And nobody was there
    If they had waited one more dayÖ.
    I deserve their kindness, donít I?
    I need a friend, the caress of words
    All the things I had before

    I filled my bathtub with self-pity today
    Itís all I have,
    Since I pushed my family away




    Submitted on 2007-01-15 18:48:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So I love this piece, truly, you were writing me. I loathe sometimes in self-pity and get the "woe is me" persona and then I hate myself for my selfishness, and thinking that all goes wrong for me. (Incidentally I really tend not to like those who have a "woe is me" personality, a contradiction? always! maybe its the curse of the mirror or maybe just maybe its b/c I know that I can survive I can make it out/better, or is that my house of pride?) A loner of course but half out of necessity as I am convinced others wont understand, and sometimes because I think I am too wrapped up in myself to notice that others are there, although sometimes their presence is felt. Most of the power in this poem lies in between the lines, that ring of truth that we all like to deny, you did a wonderful job writing this, I may officially be a fan. :) and Im a fan of few. Great write.

    Until we write again,
    ~ink~
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
       Wow, this is really intense. If I would have read this about a year ago, or even a few months ago I wouldn't have agreed at all. I would have thought you to be a jerk and uncaring. But my way of thinking has changed and I realize that thinking like the narrator in this poem really is self-obsessed and really self centered, to say the least.

    I think that everyone should read this poem to realize that we can all be like this. Anyway, This was intense and thank you for writing it and allowing us all to read it
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]


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