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A Demon's Pride

Author: _Phoenix
ASL Info:    18/F/FL
Elite Ratio:    4.56 - 46 /31 /21
Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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i really dont know. its just kind of random. whatever.
enjoy. - Phoenix

A Demon's Pride

Though I've been born of flesh and skin
I've been ratified in blood and sin
Performing the Devil's Sacrifice
Stained with hate and curséd vice
Always living in the Dark
Enduring the angels' biting remarks
But above it becoming stronger still
Thanking my ever-obstinate will.
One thing yet stands in my path
To becoming head of Satan's Class
My demonic pride will be my fall
I fear it still, before the end of all.

Submitted on 2007-01-15 19:41:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yep pride yo. good write. nice points. Its not really random...
| Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't really know how I feel about the content of the poem being I am not really into dark writing or thought at this point of mylife, but I do understand we've all been there.
I must compliment you on your writing style and such though. I like when a poem rhymes well, and yours certinally does. Your word choice is also wonderful. I bet you are a very articulate person.
| Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by digitalflower | [ Reply to This ]

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