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    dots Submission Name: What Ifdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I Am Not Suicidal But I Find It Easy To Write Like This So Please Dont Leave Comments Telling Me There Are Better Options Because I Am NOT Suicidal


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    dotsWhat Ifdots
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    Wondering what you would say
    If I told you today
    I wanted to end my life
    And stop the pain right away.
    What would you do
    If I told you I was through?
    Would you turn around
    And walk the other way,
    Not looking back
    Or thinking twice?
    Would you try to change my mind,
    Put me in my place,
    Tell me I am supposed to be here
    And life is too precious give away?
    Would you lie to me
    and tell me you have to leave?
    You can?t talk me through this.
    I am just turning into a mess.
    Would you stick beside me
    And not let me look down?
    Would you tell me everything would be okay,
    When I thought I was struck to the ground?
    So this question I ask you today...
    What would you do
    If I told you I wanted to die today




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      I Know Its Not A Joke But I Used To Be Suicidal And I Know What Its Like To Go Through That But I Have Also Lost A Number Of Friends Due To Suicide And I Dont Know Why I Write Poems Like This But It Seems Easier For Me To Write If You Have Any Other Questions About My Writing Then Let Me Know
    xXx *Mwah* Luv Stacey
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
      i think if your not suical you shouldnt be writeing like this cause being suical is no joke
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by gloomyanddoomy | [ Reply to This ]
      ah well first i like how you put a rhyme scheme into this write.
    I do think, however, that poems with too many questions are left travelling in circles. I mean, most people who find out that someone they are close to is suicidal will do something about it, they wont walk away. so this write sounds like melodramatic feelings that are not only irrational but suicidal.

    I am sorry If you are feeling like death is the best way out but it really isnt. You die young, and you don't leave your mark in the world. you just rot in the ground and people forget about you and move on.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]


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