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    dots Submission Name: the Sacred Cowdots
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    Author: geherald
    ASL Info:    26/male/PA
    Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 132/127/42
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    dotsthe Sacred Cowdots
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    the sacred cow walks down the street,
    where flowers are thrown at his feet.
    on he walks past the city wells,
    on to the stable where he dwells.

    the witch's cat watches from above,
    while people bless the cow with love.
    the hunter's god lounges by the fire,
    dreaming of the fox, with a burning desire.

    the eagle and hawk fly high in the sky,
    asking each other "what the fuck?" and "why?"
    the field mouse hides-out with the snake,
    and doesn't get eaten for heaven's sake.

    all the animals envy the cow,
    and wonder why, when, and how,
    did people pick this creature to praise?
    is it because beef is so easy to raise?




    Submitted on 2007-01-15 21:35:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hilarious. Didnt find it insulting one bit. Its all about how the reader interprets it and thst dude down there obv takes things way too seriously
    | Posted on 2014-08-16 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, greg, you are the most amazing person in the universe. this poem really speaks to me and says volumes about you and the crazy way your brain works. this is absolutely amazing. i am definately adding it as a favorite. Keep up the good work.

    LuckyEmz
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by LuckyEmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Funny, funny. I think anyone would be mistaken to think you were denegrating religion per se, because "sacred cows" are most often found outside of theology and this could apply to anything we might "worship".

    I like the apparent jealously of the other animals.
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      you asked me to repost.

    HERE COMES MY REPLY!

    the eagle and hawk fly high in the sky,
    asking each other "what the [censored]?" and "why?"
    the field mouse hides-out with the snake,
    and doesn't get eaten for heaven's sake.

    I dunno why, but those rhymes seem just a tad bit like they shouldn't be there, or at least be in a different context. Just a bit of a different tone from the rest of the poem.

    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting allegories and allusions throughout the poem. I think this one went a little over my head as far as the reference goes, but it's a very well set up poem. I think some of the rhymes are reaching a bit, like you didn't really have the right words, so you made up one that didn't make sense, so you reached.

    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      the sacred cow walks down the street,
    where flowers are thrown at his feet.
    on he walks past the city wells,
    on to the stable where he dwells.

    the witch's cat watches from above,
    while people bless the cow with love.
    the hunter's god lounges by the fire,
    dreaming of the fox, with a burning desire.

    the eagle and hawk fly high in the sky,
    asking each other "what the [censored]?" and "why?"
    the field mouse hides-out with the snake,
    and doesn't get eaten for heaven's sake.

    all the animals envy the cow,
    and wonder why, when, and how,
    did people pick this creature to praise?
    is it because beef is so easy to raise?



    Sacred cows in general are institutions thought to be untouchable/ beyond reproach in society as a whole, so I have a slightly different viewpoint concerning the purpose of the write (which might be totally wrong, but here goes...). The impression you've left me in this post has to do with authority figures as a whole, and their unquestioned power (especially in the last few years) in virtually every area of life despite the deep resentment such power may create. The obvious candidate for such criticism would be the presidency of this nation and the overwhelming dislike the U.S. has stirred among people in every corner of the globe (if globes are square, that is). Since the other 'animals' don't consider us to be special, they wonder why we've anointed ourselves as such (pointedly observing we could be eaten as easily as we could be worshipped).

    Just my thoughts.
    Take care.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Im gunna have to agree with sam on this one i am seeing alot of religion bashing in this peice ... but Amen to living in american and you got that right to bash anything you want that freedom of speech which was given to you through your four fathers who based their decision IN GOD WE TRUST ... UNDER GOD ... to give you that right ...

    And as an amaerican i have a right to bring all of the above up to you !
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this to be very funny to bash the religion. I like the way you describe the cow being praise and how some people just don't understand why. I also like how you raised the question of why the cow. This makes me think of my Indian friend and I am sure he would laugh his #$% off. Now I am not bashing any religion but I just took it as a joking poem. Have a sence of humor people! Geat job.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Winston | [ Reply to This ]
      This was kind of harsh, and to me, felt like it was slamming a whole religion and way of life...now, that's your right and all, but seriously...c'mon...

    Other than that, the imagery was great, I loved the line about the field mouse hangin with the snake...it worked well to show the utter confusion of all the animals...

    Sam
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Falling Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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