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    dots Submission Name: How Can I Title My Telescope?dots
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    Author: FarawayFeelings
    ASL Info:    16/F/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 159/74/72
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHow Can I Title My Telescope?dots
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    Dreams with you still come,
    with an eerie ease,
    they stay with me,
    and I feel strangely.
    As if there were a child in my heart,
    sitting in a low cloud of mist,
    and grasping for it.

    But this naive little girl,
    is tired of there being nothing,
    no substance and no density.
    She's knowing,
    that soon the missing you will cease,
    and can only imagine,
    what will go with it.

    Emily was right,
    my nerves are sitting,
    in straight backed chairs,
    seeing now that differences are,
    irreconciliable.

    What was done,
    was done,
    but what was,
    I cannot say was love.

    But that is irrelevant,
    as we were,
    for too long.

    So I'm withdrawing from,
    a savant-like feeling,
    that stems from wanting,
    to reconcile,

    I was already in love,
    and it irks me that you,
    could make me question that,
    but your power trip,
    will slowly decline,
    as you feel my defacite,
    because I know you can't,
    not feel this forever.




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