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    dots Submission Name: City Skyline of Legal Systemsdots
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    Author: FarawayFeelings
    ASL Info:    16/F/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 159/74/72
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 735
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 1030



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    dotsCity Skyline of Legal Systemsdots
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    I am sitting on the edge of a 26 story building,
    with no intention of jumping, I might add,
    I look out,
    and all I can see,
    are court proceedings and paranoia.

    I'm far past analyzing my actions,
    I figure weighing them out now,
    makes no sense,
    I have no idea why I open the whole in my face,
    sometimes.

    Today around noon or so,
    it seemed to rain from the ground up.

    The other night,
    it bothered me to be,
    without you.
    Tonight it's fucking great.
    Tomorrow it will be even better,
    I can just see the elation escalating,
    until the whole scene just peels away,
    to reveal,
    that you still aren't there!

    Ha! I say,
    to the fool who thinks,
    not at all,
    but of you.
    I pray to whomever,
    [I don't believe anyway],
    that they realize before I did,
    that you can't,
    make sound of silence.




    Submitted on 2007-01-15 22:27:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      what are you looking out for? are sitting on he edge or a ledge? your writing is very obscure but interesting,
    give more detail withouy disclosure.
    your lines sound great but not connecting to anything particular
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by gjenkins | [ Reply to This ]
      cool that was different. i like the part bout raining from ground up.
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      ok
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by ChickenLittle | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very interesting. It sounds more like thoughts and reflection than anything else.

    nice.
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]


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