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    dots Submission Name: Adulterydots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsAdulterydots
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    Iím so receptive - as the glowing light
    That touched our faces now and then
    When we would shift,

    Two heads beneath one Christmas tree
    In garland lamps beyond the pungent fur,

    Eternal,

    still smelling woods in stupor,
    another life, another place,
    so far away, like ours.


    And then days after, guilt on every eyelash,
    Entreating steps in pagan rioting
    Of Midwinter Eve circlets -

    I wouldnít even dare

    I would just stand and stare
    And take to whatís left for me
    Your perfume on my shirt by accident

    Expiring all too quickly.

    God help me outlove this love,
    outpray heretic's prayers
    and cry imaginary eyes
    for what strenth there's left
    to outdo one of the 10 commandements

    my commendation
    to the traced bluntness of New Year's vows.






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      Iím so receptive - as the glowing light
    That touched our faces now and then
    When we would shift,

    Two heads beneath one Christmas tree
    In garland lamps beyond the pungent fur,

    Eternal,

    still smelling woods in stupor,
    another life, another place,
    so far away, like ours.



    There is an interesting juxtaposition of pagan and Christian symbolism as a typology for unfaithfulness in this write, especially the admission of willingness/weakness/surrender in the very first phrase. Am I to assume that the core of this post has to do with a battle of the alluring senses offering pleasure to a reeling believer at the price of guilt that almost, but wasn't quite, consummated? Because the two divergent paths described in this poem seem to be held together only with memory and the hope of a restoration that may never fully occur. Is it possible to possess the best of both worlds without fully surrendering one to the other? Food for thought.

    Nicely done
    Bill
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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