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    dots Submission Name: run awaydots
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    Author: foxy lee
    ASL Info:    20 f/CT/SA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 27/23/10
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 578
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1268



    Description:
       this means something about feeling lost and a little scared of life...not knowing what the future holds...and the one thing that keeps you sane through it all


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    The sea grabs angrily at the empty shore
    while the wind howls and cries a sorrowful tale
    the unforgiving rain pours down
    on its victim of fate..

    a young woman...running away

    With every step
    she leaves her memories behind in the sand
    to be washed away into oblivion

    Her tear stained, darkened eyes
    are pools of infinite sadness
    and her long brown hair, once flowing
    hangs limply on her back

    With every step
    her heart races inside her stifled chest
    where her feelings,
    once bursting to break free
    are harbered by neglect

    Anguished tears
    fall down her pretty face
    and she wipes them away
    with untimely grace

    Pounding the sand
    with her every step
    afraid her life
    means only regret

    She is running away...

    Running away from her thoughts
    her mind
    her heart
    her soul

    running away from her herself...

    She does not know
    where she is going to
    does not know
    where she is coming from
    but she runs, to remind herself
    that she is alive




    Submitted on 2007-01-16 10:36:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is amazing. this is describing me right now. i want to run away...to where? who knows? from where?....can't remember. just as long as im running away.

    as i was reading this, i felt it all. your timing for posting this piece is perfect.
    i enjoyed this, i totally relate to these feelings.
    the flow and pace of this piece is excellent. imagery is great too. as i said, i imagined this was me, i could see it! lol
    my fav part ~

    'With every step
    her heart races inside her stifled chest
    where her feelings,
    once bursting to break free
    are harbered by neglect'

    just brilliant.
    i'm adding this one to my favs.
    michelle

    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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