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    dots Submission Name: Unhearddots
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    Author: Lil gal
    ASL Info:    32/F-ya/here
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 355/216/36
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 751
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 324



    Description:
       I know this is short, but I wanted to get to the point of what I'm trying to convey.


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    dotsUnhearddots
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    No opinion to be had,
    words fall from parted mute lips.

    Retard off deaf ears,
    hanging in the air for no one to hear.

    Listening without understanding,
    understanding without listening.

    The mouth moves with no sound,
    no one wants to become aware.




    Submitted on 2007-01-16 13:03:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey i like it good work it's short but it get's to the point
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by gloomyanddoomy | [ Reply to This ]
      not bad...short and sweet and to the point~one thing though that I dont understand is "Retard off deaf ears,"
    what were you going for with that line, let me know please~overall, good...its completely fitting to you style...ttyl luv! :)
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]


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