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    dots Submission Name: If only...dots
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    Author: psyko
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 376/168/66
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    Average Vote:    1.0000
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    I saw you a dozen times today,
    though it was only in my mind's eye.
    I saw your smile, i saw your love,
    I saw your tears when I first said goodbye.

    I felt my heart missing many times today,
    As I held on to all those memories.
    I felt my heart become lost without you,
    And I fell straight down to my knees.
    (I'm all alone)

    (chorus)
    I beg, my Lord, take this cup from me, it's all too much for me, If only I had it to do over again, If only, my God, If only.

    I knew it was time to say goodbye today,
    As it killed me to be apart.
    I knew my chance had passed away,
    It burdened my broken heart.

    And I saw your smile one last time today,
    As tears streamed down my face.
    It's one thing that I can never say,
    That you were never worth the chase.
    (you gave me life)

    (Chorus)

    My wrongs were too much for you to handle, your burden was made too strong, but I was blind, too blind to see, it couldn't last that long.

    (chorus)





    Submitted on 2007-01-16 13:54:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really heart-wrenching... Kinda made me wanna cry.
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]


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