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    dots Submission Name: If only...dots

    Author: psyko
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       well... it is what it is

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    dotsIf only...dots

    I saw you a dozen times today,
    though it was only in my mind's eye.
    I saw your smile, i saw your love,
    I saw your tears when I first said goodbye.

    I felt my heart missing many times today,
    As I held on to all those memories.
    I felt my heart become lost without you,
    And I fell straight down to my knees.
    (I'm all alone)

    I beg, my Lord, take this cup from me, it's all too much for me, If only I had it to do over again, If only, my God, If only.

    I knew it was time to say goodbye today,
    As it killed me to be apart.
    I knew my chance had passed away,
    It burdened my broken heart.

    And I saw your smile one last time today,
    As tears streamed down my face.
    It's one thing that I can never say,
    That you were never worth the chase.
    (you gave me life)


    My wrongs were too much for you to handle, your burden was made too strong, but I was blind, too blind to see, it couldn't last that long.


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      This is really heart-wrenching... Kinda made me wanna cry.
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]

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