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Author: _Phoenix
ASL Info:    18/F/FL
Elite Ratio:    4.56 - 46 /31 /21
Words: 48
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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... random idea quirked into my head, and i wrote.
enjoy. - Phoenix


I cannot see
I cannot hear
Yet even now I feel your fear.
I sense your terror
Lying deep inside.
For although I cannot see behind
And even though my eyes are blind
Now you know there's not a pill
That can keep you from my mind.

Submitted on 2007-01-16 16:24:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  im confused...But i like pills...^.^ lol
| Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by 2xhatedxsoulx2 | [ Reply to This ]
  iight, what I got from this piece was someone knows someone fully, inside and out, and no matter how they try to change themselves with pills, the main character knows who the pill popper is.

That's what I got from your piece. The only thing I'd change is flesh it out a bit..

| Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by Falling Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  I hate pills, no matter what kind, but were you on pills when you wrote this cause i'm kinda confused and not very bright so can you let me know what i'm missing. I think you meant though in the 3rd line not know, but hit me back and let me know what the random idea is, and i'm not trying to be rude just curious.
| Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]

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