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    dots Submission Name: Watching You Sleepdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 966
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       I thought of this while laying in bed with my baby...


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    dotsWatching You Sleepdots
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    I lay on your chest
    I hear your heart
    My breath falls with yours
    Your hair lay on the pillow
    Like a deep brown ribbon
    Your eyes closed
    You look so innocent
    So helpless
    I kiss your forehead
    Wrapped in your imbrace
    Our bodies become one
    Your body heat lighting me inside
    My heart beats for you
    I only breathe when your near
    And all the silence says the emotions
    That are left unsaid
    Everything comes out
    While we lie here
    As soon as I let myself fall
    I wake up
    And your gone....




    Submitted on 2007-01-16 16:53:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow. What the [censored]?? I got it but didn't. OK well whatever love ya!!
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so sad and heartfelt. I have no idea whats going on with you.

    Out in the cold,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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