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    dots Submission Name: feet of greendots
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    Author: laniejane
    ASL Info:    26
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 53/67/36
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsfeet of greendots
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    1 foot of green
    looped and pulled
    metal do your magic
    what will you be?

    2 feet of green
    tighter with practice
    can do it now blinded
    warmth your destiny

    3 feet of green
    now calloused and sore
    yet found it quite calming
    now ill wrap you 'round me!










    Submitted on 2007-01-16 17:06:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      more like knitting a scarf, me thinks....??
    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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