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    dots Submission Name: Hard timesdots
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    Author: EternallyMystic
    ASL Info:    18-F-Mich
    Elite Ratio:    2.05 - 9/18/25
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 806
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    dotsHard timesdots
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    You know, sometimes, it's hard to smile

    as you find yourself lying in a ditch

    next to the road of life,

    clothes torn and a cut lip,

    raped with love and a walking stick...

    Sometimes it's hard to smile

    as the cars fly past your tattered body

    making their obligitory eye contact

    as they prey they don't contract

    your ill luck - it can be hard to smile,

    just once in a while

    as the blood flows from your soul

    and no one notices

    or offers a bandage -

    it can be hard to smile, keep a stiff upper lip

    and swollow the S.O.B.s




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      "and swollow the S.O.B.s" was a horrid ending to what was otherwise a wonderful and seemingly thoughtful poem. I'll give you a 9.7 out of 10 for it, but just caze I really hated the last line. The rest of this was great and had a wonderful flow to it. Hope to read more from you soon ^__^
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      Ur so right, it's hard to smile when life keeps kicking u in the face and stomping on ur head repetitively. I like what ur saying, I like the lines "as you find yourself lying in a ditch
    next to the road of life," it's how I feel most of the time. great write.
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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