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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Lady Tastydots
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    Author: Mykquillion
    ASL Info:    20/M/NEB
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 109/124/41
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 954
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 314



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    dotsSweet Lady Tastydots
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    Gloriously smooth onyx cocoa,
    Mixed with the utter fluid of a moocow,
    Put into symmetrical rectangles,
    With a embossed seal
    Of feminine pronouns;
    Her.
    She.
    Covered with a thin plastic blanket;
    Listing all the contents,
    Except purified joy.




    Submitted on 2007-01-16 23:20:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      makes me smile. How we ladies do love our chocolate! Yep yummmm.
    | Posted on 2007-01-25 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      Definetly a nifty write. Yep going to have to look at a hersheys bar differently now. :) You know, I never really noticed the feminine pronouns, very interesting. This is a great write. Gets you thinking and you described it all so well.
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      all I can really say about this is nice job~very diferent way to look at it! :) take care
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]
      I never saw a hershey bar this way, but now it's all i'm going to see whenever i do, lol. I enjoyed this write soooooo much.
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      different in a strange kind of way,but i like these kind of writes, different from the norm.
    moocow,feminine pronouns, purified joy,a bit of dry humour there as well. i like it, good work.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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