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Waving To The Torpid Flames

Author: Reckoner
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Words: 220
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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just came to me, while peering deep into the last glowing embers resting in my fireplace.

Waving To The Torpid Flames

Allow the flames to dance
let them fill me if they will
if they find it best to sit me still
calm and collect by the fire

tell me your thoughts
as if I weren't already reading them
teach me to remain still
as if I weren't already waiting for another

allow the flames to dance
let them curl whips in dripping white hands
fold me around the blackened wood
that seperates the flames into little echoes of sorrow

green eyes never word it the same
the only woman that will ever utter my name
her lashes always telling me what to believe
instantly dissolving any bygone splendor

allow the flames to blacken
let them kneel on their own
sware they never caught a glimpse
of her reinforced smile and ruddy lips

darkened rooms
they will never fail to obey her
collapsing breath
dragging gloom across my ashen pillow

allow the flames to suppress the heat
churning the oil between colourless canines
my eyes may refuse to tear
but they cannot refuse to spill whats left of me

dancing with the dormant flames
my imagination gets the best of me
sleeping till my eyes begin to shut
I allow the flames to eventually engulf me

Submitted on 2007-01-16 23:45:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  daaaaaaamn you and your fireplace! but wait, ruddy lips? what are you saying?lol.

"tell me your thoughts
as if I weren't already reading them" that is so beyond sweet it's not even funny.

there's somen different about this one though, sortta different from your usual style....not sure what it is, lord help hmmmm...maybe because it's less sentence fragments?? not sure...but it's different, and gorgeous of course. thank you so much for these my generous love. :D I adore you. see you soon

| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]

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