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    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    18/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 196/262/123
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 559
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       yea this is lame. I am still remembering my ex but moving on at the same time, and its leaving me stuck emotionally and in my writing. Sorry for this, I know its crap. You dont have to comment if you dont want to.


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    The words won't come.
    This conversation I now dismiss.
    Wishing to go back to frequent memorys.
    All thats left is to reminisce.
    I'm afraid to turn back time.
    Just because it won't matter much.
    You will never be just mine.
    And all the pain I ever felt.
    That was all because of you.
    Is gone now from my heart.
    Yet you arent yet.


    This is weird.
    I keep going back.
    To all those kisses
    That I now lack.




    Submitted on 2007-01-17 09:28:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Heh, join the club. If I were to try to put all of the thoughts and feelings down in writing, it would just feel like a long list of me whining. You know- passed the hurt but still remembering everything. That's where I am.

    "I'm afraid to turn back time.
    Just because it won't matter much."

    Theoretically I feel like if I got a boyfriend I could forget everything sooner. Or at least replace the memory. But that's immature and unfair...

    Sorry for my weird comment-esque, I feel like it's needed from time to time.
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting write
    One can tell you seemed a little stuck for words in this write but you made the most of it and created a good write
    My only advice is be careful with the rhymes at times it does seem like forced rhyme
    Excellent Job
    Looking forward to reading more from you
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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