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    dots Submission Name: Journey of the Ancient Starsdots

    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsJourney of the Ancient Starsdots

    As I look to the sky
    ancient lights pierce eternal space
    each pulse, every beam
    takes 10,000 years to shine upon me
    tiny fossels set in spaces black rock back drop
    only I pray they don't stop shining
    that long ago all of the stars dissappeared
    and we just have'nt
    received the darkness
    in the stead of the 10,000 years.

    Submitted on 2007-01-17 09:39:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it would indeed be a dark an brink state if the lovely stars no longer shined upon us,I thought this a excellent write, it was said beautifully and simply and yet gave the reading something to ponder keep up the good works
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      Did you spell ancient wrong in the title on purpose? *complain* no, I'm kidding.
    It's an interesting thought, and only prooves to me the meaning that time is simply...
    a concept... distance is also a concept...
    we humans rely so much on our so-called sciences and religious beliefs...
    but the universe only makes sense if you force it to.
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really amazing. A thought I have never really pondered on. Its sad and myterious at the same time. nice write.

    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]

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