Journey of the Ancient Stars by Twice

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dots

<< | >>

Submission Name: Journey of the Ancient Stars dots

--------------------------------------------------------

Author:	Twice
Elite Ratio:	4 - 71/82/52
Words:	61

Class/Type:	Poetry/Nature
Total Views:	866
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	393

Description:

Journey of the Ancient Stars dots

-------------------------------------------

As I look to the sky
ancient lights pierce eternal space
each pulse, every beam
takes 10,000 years to shine upon me
tiny fossels set in spaces black rock back drop
only I pray they don't stop shining
that long ago all of the stars dissappeared
and we just have'nt
received the darkness
in the stead of the 10,000 years.

Submitted on 2007-01-17 09:39:26 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

||| Comments |||
  it would indeed be a dark an brink state if the lovely stars no longer shined upon us,I thought this a excellent write, it was said beautifully and simply and yet gave the reading something to ponder keep up the good works
adnil
| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
  Did you spell ancient wrong in the title on purpose? *complain* no, I'm kidding.
It's an interesting thought, and only prooves to me the meaning that time is simply...
a concept... distance is also a concept...
we humans rely so much on our so-called sciences and religious beliefs...
but the universe only makes sense if you force it to.
| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really amazing. A thought I have never really pondered on. Its sad and myterious at the same time. nice write.

-angel-
| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece? 7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?

132287

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Enter your search terms Submit search form

Web www.eliteskills.com

[ Quick Signup ]
[ Lost Password ]

January 10 07
131,497 Poems
Posted

I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

[ Angst Poetry ]
[ Cutters ]
[ Famous Poetry ]
[ Poetry Scams ]

FontSize:
[ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.