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Revenge Part I

Author: BrokenAngel
ASL Info:    21/F/MI
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anything goes like rock and roll.

Revenge Part I

Falling down like acid rain
I hear you cry again
Your pain, so warm
This is where my revenge begins

Torturing not the physical body
I have warped your mind
There is no future for you now
All that's left is me

When pain turns to pleasure
I'll leave you to weep
You'll fall farther than I did
That is how I'll make you pay

Bringing you closer to the depths
I laugh while you stumble and fall
And I lift you slowly to your knees
Your eyes glowing with sweet and tender--

I throw you to the edge
Showing you how far you'll fall
But you don't see
This is where I've planned your end

Turning you for a poisoned kiss
I swear you'll die upon this cliff
With the hateful scars of memories
Face down you'll float on dark red seas

Submitted on 2007-01-17 10:03:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow, I would hate to be ur enemy. I can feel the hate radiating from this write.
| Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]

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