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    dots Submission Name: Revenge Part Idots
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    Author: BrokenAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 179/157/47
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsRevenge Part Idots
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    Falling down like acid rain
    I hear you cry again
    Your pain, so warm
    This is where my revenge begins

    Torturing not the physical body
    I have warped your mind
    There is no future for you now
    All that's left is me

    When pain turns to pleasure
    I'll leave you to weep
    You'll fall farther than I did
    That is how I'll make you pay

    Bringing you closer to the depths
    I laugh while you stumble and fall
    And I lift you slowly to your knees
    Your eyes glowing with sweet and tender--

    I throw you to the edge
    Showing you how far you'll fall
    But you don't see
    This is where I've planned your end

    Turning you for a poisoned kiss
    I swear you'll die upon this cliff
    With the hateful scars of memories
    Face down you'll float on dark red seas




    Submitted on 2007-01-17 10:03:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I would hate to be ur enemy. I can feel the hate radiating from this write.
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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