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    dots Submission Name: What did you mean?dots

    Author: redeemer
    ASL Info:    19/female/venus
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 85/93/58
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is about young love gone awry

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    dotsWhat did you mean?dots

    You lay next to me, and you're fast asleeo
    I look out your window, the one next to the bed
    I watch the sky go dark, and with the falling rain, it seems to weep
    I'm still thinking and contiplating, reasoning through everything you said
    What did you mean, when you said you love me
    I just don't understand, we are so young, we are only teens
    This love is still young, it's still very nieve
    And so is my heart, what do you expect, i'm just seventeen
    What did you mean, when you said, will you marry me
    I can't even think how, you can ask that question
    Our future's are still fuzy, so far in the distance, and something we can't see
    I just don't understand how you think, I am your possesion
    What did you mean, when you said, love me our die
    Why the ultimatum, why the force
    You said that you couldn't take the pain, if I was the one to make you cry
    We're not even married, and you've already pushed me to divorce
    What did I mean when I said, goodbye
    I meant that this is it, it's not fair, i'm tired
    I'm sorry but this was how it had to end, I really did try
    I just hope you know that the way you seemed to love me, was always something I admired

    Submitted on 2007-01-17 18:55:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The narrarator of this poem seems to be a strong individual. Wise beyond her years...very mature. To be so swept up in what was probably first love, but also smart enough to realize it wasn't good for her. It was suffocating her. I loved the line about not being married...but being pushed to divorce..it just grabbed me...when words like marriage, love, committment..are used too soon or too often...they seem suffocating...and they just start to not feel right. Those are things that need to develop...and I think the narrarator realized this and did what was right for HER. Good for her. :) ....great write. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      I would consider looking through it for some typing errors.

    Seems so sweet but sceary for the girl a guy who is jumping into somthing for once in stead of the girl throwing herself at a guy.

    You portray the fear a girl would feel if a guy at a young age was jumping into things to quickly ...

    Great Job
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]

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