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    dots Submission Name: Brothers in Armsdots
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    Author: nomad knight
    Elite Ratio:    6.66 - 110/75/41
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 897
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    Description:
       I was playing with the idea of putting this as a love poem simply in that i do love the person it is addressed to, but in a platonic way. I don't think it should be that socially akward to tell another guy that you love him or that it should always be taken as a homosexual statement by others.

    This poem has a number of metaphores that relate to a genre of music called "power metal" that is generally much more popular in Europe than it is in the U.S.A. It's topics often are more medieval warrior, mythology and fantasy based. It's a type of music we both have come to like alot.

    so any suggestions on how to make this piece a little better or any other comments you may have, would be greatly appreciated.


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    dotsBrothers in Armsdots
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    Here I put feelings of friendship in rhyme
    A friendship weíve had for several years past
    Like a brother youíve become in that time
    and my fondness of you will no doubt last
    Through darkness we have stood by each other
    With no contact we were there in spirit
    In dark to come Iíll still be your brother
    Ride as one when to battle we commit
    if in peace or in battle you should fall
    Deep inside my heart you will live again
    Draw my sword with you when we heed the call
    To a crusade through flames and pouring rain
    Iíll not abandon you, as you have not me
    Together, brothers in arms, we stand free




    Submitted on 2007-01-17 23:46:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww its really sweet. That guy must be pretty cool. I guess I have friends like that too, that I love endlessly but not in the conventional 'love' but more in the sense that I would do anything for them, and they will always live on with me.

    There is nothing I would quite change about it, I mean there are a few things that could be switched aroung to work more but I bet its just written that way because of how it worked out with your metaphors and all but because of the fact that I dont know much about the genre of power metal, I can not provide very constructive critizism.

    I really liked how when you focus on a war, instead of saying you would do anything to protect him, like stand in front of a bullet, you say he will live on with you, like even though its hard to show it, I will always care for you as my closest friend.

    Dont worry, its not homosexual, it seems like a wonderful friendship:)
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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