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    dots Submission Name: Angel Wingsdots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 678
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       Well.... there it is... it's not great but I've been through a hell of a block.


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    dotsAngel Wingsdots
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    Flying like the east wind,
    Carried by the clouds,
    Passing on a breeze,
    Your heart, your love.

    Angel Wings,
    Carry me to my Utopia of Nowhere,
    Lift my heart up through this storm.
    Here in the sky, I know myself.

    Sweet Seraph,
    Bear no envy towards me.
    I could only wither in your glory.
    I know the truth.

    Angle Wings,
    Guide my step,
    Steady my hand,
    Seal my soul.

    Sheathe your knife in my heart.
    Twist me free from the agony.
    I'll not hold a grudge.
    For you have shown me Utopia.




    Submitted on 2007-01-18 12:05:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Utopia you say? Your words are not misleading as this really is a piece of wonder and excellence. The idea leaves a lot to imagine and the structure still leaves me wanting. Did you lack poetic challenges these times when you were away. Well you succeeded to be the master of your own creation for sure. Very good.
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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