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    dots Submission Name: extremities tearing dots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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       love your friends, no matter how tired you are, how far away they are, how long you've gone without seeing them, a call, a hug, a handshake, a beer, whatever it is, life doesn't last forever, and someday you'll be kicking yourself.


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    dotsextremities tearing dots
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    A rash decision, extreme and anguished
    A pure soul lost, never to be retained
    hollow, empty, gray, and cold
    and yet here I sit, trying to see through it

    every thought, brings yet another memory
    of things that were simpler, even better
    better than the way things are now, surely
    and yet here I sit, wondering where you are now.

    It doesn't seem real, my mind refuses it
    thinking maybe i'll say a good bye to you
    I want to understand, but it hurts
    then on the other hand i don't want to.

    I'll keep those memories of you
    the good ones will overshadow the worst
    and the fall breezes that blow through the trees,
    will remind me of the time that I learned

    Life isn't what you would expect
    life doesn't always ring so true
    Life never wanted to abandon
    if there was light on the other side
    i hope you found what you were looking for.

    Death, I guess it scares me
    and perhaps i'll have some closure
    closure in the form of memories

    I wish I knew where you were
    I wish I could see you again
    I wish I would have stopped by more
    I wish you would've held on for one more day
    I wish you would've called your brother
    I wish that you would've put the gun down
    I wish that you were here again
    ...
    ...
    ...

    But I hope that you're in a better place now
    wherever that place is...
    just know that i'm thinking of you
    right along with everyone else.







    Submitted on 2007-01-18 12:11:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is explosive on such a deep meaningful level...you wrote this perfect and i wouldn't change anything about it...
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm in tears as i respond.. this one really hit home.
    ~love your friends, no matter how tired your are~


    that was such a touching piece.

    with head held high we must wait our turn to join the black parade. tho chase the final curtain and join the chorus invisible


    keep up
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      "I wish you would've held on for one more day" How I have wished that statement many times myself.

    I like the wondering in this piece. The raw emotion of it. I also like the resolve of it in the last stanza: "But I hope that you're in a better place now/where that place is.../just know that i'm thinking of you/right along with everyone else."

    Sadness and memories are clearly woven into this piece.
    Sadly, I relate too this piece all to well.

    Take care of yourself,
    Beth
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Amen to that! I guess the only thing that everyone truly has in common is their fate. Death is an inevitable part of life...but when it comes and how it comes is entirely unpredictable. I just thought what you said was completely true...friends are a really easy part of life to take for granted...and maybe when they're gone is the only time we can really look back on memories and think, "Damn I'm glad I knew them...I'm glad they were a part of my life. I wish I'd told them." Life is definitely not what you'd expect...but anyway...I just thought these were beautiful words....definitely straight from the heart to someone who is is going to be missed by many people. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      amazing....and very wise words at the top.. this must have come from your heart..
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]


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