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Forever by your side


Author: elseibi
ASL Info:    20/f/uk
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 228 /180 /38
Words: 48
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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its really unfinished but heres what ive got so far.. im gonna be working on it tommoz but for now i gotta goto bed heh. muhc luv xxx

~lou~


Forever by your side



I miss you,
though ive never,
met you,

we talk,
and i feel,
i belong,

I love you,
every fibre,
of your being,

for you,
my heart
does long,

i wish,
we could be,
together,

that i could be
forever,
by your side.




Submitted on 2007-01-18 17:51:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey there, pretty li'l miss,
ooh, this is good...real good.
why do we always want what we can't have? i guess it's just the way it is....such a shame lol
as has already been said, it is something we can all relate to, very clever.
top marks from me too!
keep smilin'
michelle
| Posted on 2007-02-05 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  it's all what makes your heart beat. love for the sake of love....(no naughty running off with on-line lovers)
| Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  Longing for something that is not there...
I believe that is something that everyone can relate to, which makes this a very flexible, as well as interesting piece.

I look forward to the final draft.
| Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Argola | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, Lou! This has a dynamite title that a reader can't resist! Your words are enchanting, and this is going to make a real first prize poem! I love the thought and the theme of the poem. Unrequited love has a poetic appeal that is second to none. Nice work Love!
| Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  What lovely words you use here. I look forward to reading the final version.

Frank.
| Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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