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    dots Submission Name: Forever by your sidedots
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    Author: elseibi
    ASL Info:    20/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 228/180/38
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 900
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 367



    Description:
       its really unfinished but heres what ive got so far.. im gonna be working on it tommoz but for now i gotta goto bed heh. muhc luv xxx

    ~lou~


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    dotsForever by your sidedots
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    I miss you,
    though ive never,
    met you,

    we talk,
    and i feel,
    i belong,

    I love you,
    every fibre,
    of your being,

    for you,
    my heart
    does long,

    i wish,
    we could be,
    together,

    that i could be
    forever,
    by your side.




    Submitted on 2007-01-18 17:51:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey there, pretty li'l miss,
    ooh, this is good...real good.
    why do we always want what we can't have? i guess it's just the way it is....such a shame lol
    as has already been said, it is something we can all relate to, very clever.
    top marks from me too!
    keep smilin'
    michelle
    | Posted on 2007-02-05 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      it's all what makes your heart beat. love for the sake of love....(no naughty running off with on-line lovers)
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Longing for something that is not there...
    I believe that is something that everyone can relate to, which makes this a very flexible, as well as interesting piece.

    I look forward to the final draft.
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Argola | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, Lou! This has a dynamite title that a reader can't resist! Your words are enchanting, and this is going to make a real first prize poem! I love the thought and the theme of the poem. Unrequited love has a poetic appeal that is second to none. Nice work Love!
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      What lovely words you use here. I look forward to reading the final version.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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