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    dots Submission Name: Letting Me Godots
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    Author: Keller
    ASL Info:    18/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 36/26/17
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLetting Me Godots
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    You think I’d hang around
    After all the things you’ve done
    You’d think I’d stand waiting
    After everything you’ve said
    You’d think I could be taken
    For granted
    After all
    You were the actor
    You were the pretentious half
    You always were
    I just couldn’t see
    I guess I was simply
    Blind
    To the truth
    All I could see was you
    And your fake lying self
    Now I’m free
    Do you regret letting me go?




    Submitted on 2007-01-18 19:37:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very intesting.. i dont see the rhyiming.. but otherwise the point is understood, and its intresting...Muy Buen!!(very good)

    Isabella
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      good poem. sounds like a song...i like it.
    write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a strong poem but I think that you changed your mind about how it was going to end up after "After everything you’ve said" After that the flow seems to change and after the "After all" the whole poem kind of goes down. I think that you could work on this a little bit more and make it a better poem ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      you go girl, you have seen a truth,
    The wise once told me though "you cant lift from a situation until you have forgiven that situation",
    but i definitely am feeling this piece,
    keep going girl:)
    | Posted on 2007-01-18 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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