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    dots Submission Name: Please Don't Abandon me!dots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 631
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       It's about teen pregnancy and how hard it is to tell your parents your pregnant...


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    dotsPlease Don't Abandon me!dots
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    Disappointment fills their eyes
    All they can do is ask why
    And I canít answer
    I didnít mean to, I swear
    It just happened
    I really love him
    It wasnít my fault
    This is a problem I couldnít solve
    Iím only fifteen
    Now having a baby
    Such a sad disgrace
    You canít even look at my face
    You wonder where you went wrong
    It was my problem all along
    Just please donít abandon me
    I need you, canít you see?




    Submitted on 2007-01-18 19:50:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ooph what a scary thought. im 18 and that idea still scares me. in the heat of the moment you know everything till you get the call, and you watch all your plans melt away.... good luck
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...

    This is quite powerful.

    You have a nice way of portraying your feelings succinctly, as well as your idea of what others are feeling about the present situation.

    You give people who have never been where the poem is an insight into what it's like to be 15 and expecting a baby. You make others comprehend.

    Good luck to you-
    Sash1979



    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Sash1979 | [ Reply to This ]


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