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    dots Submission Name: Last Chance to Dancedots
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    Author: Mykquillion
    ASL Info:    20/M/NEB
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 109/124/41
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Haiku/
    Total Views: 968
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 92



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    dotsLast Chance to Dancedots
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    Why won’t you love me?
    Just, for a little while,
    I will be dead soon.




    Submitted on 2007-01-19 01:17:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      For a haiku it really reaches out and grabs out the heart of the reader. Such a painful feeling to have to beg for love at the eve of death; that shouldn't be an option for a kind soul. Sounds like the person whose love he/she is seeking has a hard time with even glancing at that person.

    -angel-
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very short and yet so tragic. I don't know what to say about this except for the fact that gave strong feelings of longing mixed with despair.
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
      Love Di....
    Hope you catch them.
    Do you need cupid to carry Diamond tipped titanium arrows?
    No I know thats not funny at all, it was not supposed to be, it was an honest question.

    Hugs
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]


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