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    dots Submission Name: kiss brush quick touchdots
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    Author: AptPupilofLife2
    ASL Info:    18/M/Berkeley,CA
    Elite Ratio:    6.79 - 113/131/48
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 244
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 361



    Description:
       things went alittle fast


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    dotskiss brush quick touchdots
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    Kiss Brush
    Quick Touch
    a Touch too quick
    a Kiss too much
    and now He reels
    at how she feels
    she starts, she goes
    “OK to stay”, OK to go
    “OK, so you know
    I said No”
    to kiss
    “No”
    to touch
    but it seems you wanted two much.
    Quickest kiss
    Briefest touch




    Submitted on 2007-01-19 02:38:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is cute. I liked the plays on words and the fact that this could also be a guy recounting the events of the night down at the police station. There's the light interp and the dark one. A short poem but a goodin.

    DB
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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