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    dots Submission Name: As long as you'll stay...dots
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    Author: Zakaria Glenza
    Elite Ratio:    0.84 - 3/6/65
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsAs long as you'll stay...dots
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    A new candle is lighted today,
    It will be shining along my way,

    Thank you to make all this light,
    Thank you, because I owe you my sight,
    Without your touch your "Dirty Slave" could not live,
    I'm having nothing, if you'd have no love to give,

    May be you'd say I'm too naive...
    but I have things in which I believe,
    (And I believe that)

    My world will be brighter, as long as you'll stay,
    So shine forever if you want me to live, and I wish you a happy birthday.
    I could never give you as much as you gave me,
    (No matter would I offer)

    How would I thank enough the one who saved me,
    (From my pain and suffer)

    I've been down, and you get me high,
    (I can easily touch the moon)

    Don't leave me, don't say good-bye,
    (I would join my grave as soon!)




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