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    dots Submission Name: masksdots
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    Author: patrick o_riley
    ASL Info:    16, male, ontario
    Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 70/91/25
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 850
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1587



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    dotsmasksdots
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    A wall,
    hiding you,
    don't let your true emotions show,
    your not real,
    stop thinking,
    we will do that for you.

    A mask,
    we have created for you,
    so that you will be safe from all pain,
    don't fear it embrace it,
    stay controlled,
    embrace the machine,
    it won't hurt.

    A person,
    without a face is nothing,
    don't let your true emotions show or you will be noticed,
    be like everybody else,
    a subject to the machine,
    give in,
    give up,
    forget
    and
    let go.

    When you give yourself away you are gone,
    Don't think just do what we tell you to do,
    for you want to be safe don't you,
    safe is not boring,
    You are not plain,
    Give in,
    give up,
    forget
    and
    Let go.

    Power by association,
    Blend in to be saved,
    Don't try and fight alone,
    the machine is not fake,
    dddoon't l..leave...
    yo...oou won't survive,
    you are powerless,
    stupid child.
    ......
    ...
    ..
    .

    You have freed yourself,
    leave and never return,
    you have won the fight,
    your are strong and human,
    don't fall for their tricks anymore,
    put the mask away and show your real beauty,
    being independent is stronger than putting on a mask,
    a facade,
    don't fail yourself,
    free yourself.




    Submitted on 2007-01-19 08:56:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The message is good, and I can feel the energy and vibes coming from it. Just remember that spelling mistakes can take away a lot from a piece. I know, Ive been there myself. Lol, but then again, I am Norwegian.

    Still, a nice try.
    Just go over it, remove the mistakes, remember that a good package is always best to make it a good piece. Not just the meaning behind the words, but the words themselves has loads of importance.

    But you are writing about an important theme, and I agree with you, totally! There is a lot of energy in this piece, and I believe you.

    Hugs!
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]


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