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    dots Submission Name: The Proofdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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    dotsThe Proofdots
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    Would you tell me,
    You were disappointed,
    But itís okay that I was wrong?
    Give me a hug
    And then say sorry
    For not seeing you in so long?
    Let me apologize,
    For being mad at you,
    For questioning my faith,
    And your faith in me,
    Had subsided,
    For I had been a little too late,
    And I asked you,
    Little tiny ironies,
    That made no sense,
    Yet, I stared you
    In the eyes,
    And gave you firm evidence,
    You can call me a liar,
    And then I can,
    Call you the name back,
    It takes one to know one,
    So I would call,
    You the same back,
    But Iím not a liar,
    I told you what was wrong
    All along,
    But the way you treated,
    My perdition.
    Only made it prolong.




    Submitted on 2007-01-19 09:40:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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