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    dots Submission Name: The Burden We Carrydots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    We carry the burden of the dead,
    For those not weak enough to live,
    And for the hope wed die for,
    Is the insight wed give,
    No one tells us why we do,
    I guess it just happens,
    What else would you call,
    A natural reaction?
    Someone dies- we cry,
    Then we go on with our lives,
    Live in the memory,
    Through what we feel inside,
    Who says its all right?
    To end another life,
    God-given, be ridden,
    You have to face the light,
    The person you knew,
    The person you loved,
    One you held dear,
    Has been rubbed,
    Out of the photograph,
    Touched up like Photoshop,
    Its all right to cry,
    When another life stops,
    Live in the memory,
    Remember the name,
    I didnt know the guy,
    But I still feel the shame




    Submitted on 2007-01-19 09:41:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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