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    dots Submission Name: Memory Lanedots

    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMemory Lanedots

    ... ... ...
    I have no sweet wish to walk it
    The shadowy memory lane
    Yet the strongest and wildest desire
    Will not rage wildly in vain

    I want that brighter blue sofa
    And the untidy blanket of love
    Perhaps only for a moment
    I wish to feel what I am of

    With Adam sleeping beside me
    tasting the apple of eve
    Ill kiss his nose for a moment
    while praying that I can believe

    And if I should fall down again
    down memory lane on high heels
    My love and yours will forever
    Walk its shadow like fallen ideals

    Submitted on 2007-01-19 10:38:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is very interesting... I was first captured by your title, because it is also the title of an Elliott Smith song, and so I just wondered what your take on this memory lane could be. While filled with some sorts of symbolism and more abstract ideas, you introduce a blue sofa in the second stanza- is this somehow symbolic for something I did not pick up on? It just seemed somewhat out of place.
    "And if I should fall down again
    down memory lane on high heels"
    These lines were for some reason especially striking to me because of the imagery of high heels... hmm.
    "Walk its shadow like fallen ideals"
    This one takes awhile to wrap your mind around- I like things that do that.
    I'll have to read some more-
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]

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