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    dots Submission Name: Mercy, Lust Kills Faster Than Lovedots

    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       My friends said that this is one of their favorites of mine that I've ever written, I'd love to know waht you all think.

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    dotsMercy, Lust Kills Faster Than Lovedots

    I want to breathe you in,
    I need your siren's voice.
    Where are those acid lips?
    That venom touch?

    Didn't you hear?
    I died from overdosing,
    On your demon eyes.
    Where did you hide your heart?

    When can I feel the cobra's love?
    That venom touch?
    I need to die tonight,
    Beneath those gleaming fangs.

    Drown me in your madness,
    Break me to the pain.
    Where will I find the cobra's love?
    When will it sink in?

    Drain me of my blood,
    Fill me with your breath.
    Where do you hide your heart?
    Where are your acid lips?

    I bleed for love of you,
    Will you bleed for me?
    Numb me to your love.
    Did you kill me in my sleep?

    Where are those acid lips?
    That venom touch?
    I need to die tonight,
    Beneath your caring fangs.

    Submitted on 2007-01-19 11:45:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Passionate with a masochistic edge. I think it is fabulous. You paint very striking pictures with the choice of words. I like ...
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      The passion respires so loudly through this poem. The sensuality and darkness, the sheer wake of the senses is a craze, a beautiful surrender to words and thought. Master craftsman of your own writing, it seems your fantasy has grown and the enormity of this poem proves it.
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      thia really impressive. shows the double edge sword of love. with out pain there is no love said someone sometime or another. anyways you captured that image perfectly. good write.
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]

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