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    dots Submission Name: They Call Me "Lonely"dots

    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 958
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       It's not very good, but it's better than a writer's block, so here it is for your consideration.

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    dotsThey Call Me "Lonely"dots

    I feel so lonely,
    Keep me locked up in my head.
    Keep the voices quiet.
    Throw away my heart.

    Destroy the key,
    Burn the room.
    Roll the dice,
    Did I die?

    Stab me through the neck,
    Bleed me to a husk.
    Then feed me to the poor.
    I think I stopped caring.

    Why can't I remember your name?
    Who are you to say I die?
    Kill me? You wouldn't dare.
    But then who am I to say?

    But please, not before I'm free.
    Free of all those burdens.
    Leeching me of my sanity,
    Those on the outside of Utopia.

    I'm unusably adorable.
    Justifiably insane.
    Death just leaves me lonely.
    So please, stop the killing.

    Submitted on 2007-01-19 11:54:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If I had read this as the first one of your poems, I'd say this has a distinctly emo feel to it.
    Why? Well, that's a little obvious. There's not any direct mention of knives, but there are other things that are generally associated with (or at least I associate them anyway) emotional hardcores.
    For example, voices in the head. Schizophrenia I say.
    Well, thou didst not speak to me with this piece, but I'll still say thanks for sharing.
    Rest in pieces.
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      killing will never stop...
    though i can relate to this...
    i can't really fully agree...
    i love all of it up until the last 4 stanzas...
    i think i might put this as a fave...
    yeah, i will!

    well see ya around
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]

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