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    dots Submission Name: Divine Liesdots

    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 655
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Don't be mad at my veiws, I don't force them on you so yeah... BUT... if you don't mind sacriligous poetry, the continue...

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    dotsDivine Liesdots

    "Brilliant lights streach across time,
    Our hearts beat out as one,
    Mirrored in my being,
    Come and join my soul."

    Hallowed grounds and undieing faith,
    Blind us to our weakness,
    Bind us in your service,
    Free us to our doom.

    Keeper of Infinity,
    In your light we grow,
    Within your hands we see,
    Beneath your boot we die.

    Falsehood keeps us close,
    Like slaves along a wall.
    Divinity will guide our steps,
    For we are blissful in our lies.

    Swords are drawn,
    The blades of silver and gold,
    Blessed by tears of His mocking birds,
    Are sheathed within our hearts.

    For love of Him,
    They martyr the cause,
    They kill to please Him,
    Please themselves, please thier empty minds.

    Submitted on 2007-01-19 11:56:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *screams* Sacrilege! Sacrilege!
    No, seriously, this is good. What I like about it is the absolute almost mechanical stripping (thats a compliment) of the concept of "holy war" and other associated acts as absolutely unrelated to the belief in God.
    Every religion preaches peace and love (find me one that doesn't and I'll eat my words) so it's difficult to pick up swords or blow yourself up or something. However brainwashing has done too much to the people of today such that their minds close, their hearts close, and they can only call themselves people in name.
    You put that across really well, and I enjoyed this poem thoroughly.
    Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      "Free us to our doom" The lines erupt and dismember the heart. The wilderness grows and the words remain only converted into visions. The hectic paths of your world must be opened now because you write as you never wrote before. I congratulate you dearly :)
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This poem is completly beautifull. It's dark shadows show the true nature that religon hides. hope you dont mind that I'm adding it to my favorites
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by TheBlackFairy | [ Reply to This ]

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