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Author: eggshells
ASL Info:    23/M/WA
Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 31 /82 /75
Words: 176
Class/Type: Poetry /Broken
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run run run

i got caught and now im makin up another


beasty submissions

roll on with times that chime and rhyme and believe it or die.

then hold the weapon up to ur head

pull the trigger

but u aint dead

the bullet is so sticky

stuck to the ocean of thought

im done im angry im ready to rot

so i end this line with a punctual period(.)

hate equals me and my mind having sex with the reaper

so im dark and im ready crimson with stabbing hate

but i love it i loathe it and and now you better be ready to rate

me and myself and dont forget i for i am the devil in your mind's eye

so now stab at my heart and love with a trap cuz im ready to die and beloved enough to


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