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hole in a wrong

Author: eggshells
ASL Info:    23/M/WA
Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 31 /82 /75
Words: 173
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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dont read this if you want to die

hole in a wrong

i've found it i wrote it i thought i held it im ready to kill and ready for a fill i hold onto a cub and raise it high as the animals all around me feast on my mind ive lost ive found ive even made but can u keep up with the reach of the blade? i hold it i tear it as it tears through me too i held a large baby but it broken me through put again these holes in my head ready to live but what happens when im already dead
so lie through my thoughts and skim on up to a nasty little bear ready to drop
an anvil on my head but i wont be dead cuz it seems im in a sex cartoon that negates all of the shame
sole on my shoe is beaten to a bloody red
cuz my heart i dropped it
i left it on the floor
ur sneaker it caught it
and now i type about its gore

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