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    Author: jermwerm
    ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203/268/83
    Words: 27
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Description:
        My girlfriend that said she loved me decided to dump me and break my heart so she could go around getting spun and fuck some wetback homeless punk loser to chaise his dope bag.


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    Abaft of life aaronic tears,
    benighted by your berave.
    Abate my feelings with your bewail,
    pilfer me in rage.




    Submitted on 2007-01-19 16:00:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      While half of the words you used could indeed be made up or perhaps real, I do not know. However, it does remind me of 'Jabberwocky'. It made me think of a knight's so long speech to a lost lover... very proper and old english, yet somewhat agressive.

    -Lucy
    | Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]


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