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Author: jermwerm ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203 /268 /83 Words: 27

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Abaft of life aaronic tears, benighted by your berave. Abate my feelings with your bewail, pilfer me in rage.

Submitted on 2007-01-19 16:00:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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While half of the words you used could indeed be made up or perhaps real, I do not know. However, it does remind me of 'Jabberwocky'. It made me think of a knight's so long speech to a lost lover... very proper and old english, yet somewhat agressive. -Lucy

| Posted on 2007-01-19 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]

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